Hey Bloggers on 23rd of August my class was doing a Recount. We were learing to wirte sentences that were Descriptive and they made sense. Here is mine!
I'm sorry to hear you were sick. Are you feeling better now?
Thank you for sharing you writing with us. I'm going to have to check out that video you recommended.
I wonder if you can re-read the first sentence. I wonder if we can make it into a combination of short and long sentences something like " It was 7.30 and I woke up early. .....etc"
Well done for writing up your recount. I really dislike it when I wake up early and can’t go back to sleep!
I like that you put your writing goal in your introduction. How do you think you did? Do you think you achieved that goal? Could you maybe have describe a little more how you felt at the park? Did it feel like it was the middle of winter and you had gone out in shorts? Or was it so cold that you felt like your nose would freeze?
Kia ora Rayhan,
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry to hear you were sick. Are you feeling better now?
Thank you for sharing you writing with us. I'm going to have to check out that video you recommended.
I wonder if you can re-read the first sentence. I wonder if we can make it into a combination of short and long sentences something like " It was 7.30 and I woke up early. .....etc"
Looking forward to future blog posts,
Miss Laxa
Hey Rayhan
ReplyDeleteWell done for writing up your recount. I really dislike it when I wake up early and can’t go back to sleep!
I like that you put your writing goal in your introduction. How do you think you did? Do you think you achieved that goal? Could you maybe have describe a little more how you felt at the park? Did it feel like it was the middle of winter and you had gone out in shorts? Or was it so cold that you felt like your nose would freeze?
Keep up the good blogging!